DR Che Writing Correction Oet General Note

What is included in this file? A very important file to pass OET in first attempt, please read all included information carefully. Must read OET guide for all modules on page 97 Introduction + Writing and speaking package details

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sample 2 (Medicine) sample 3 (Medicine) sample 4 (Medicine) sample 5 (Medicine) sample 6 (Medicine) sample 7 (Nursing) sample 8 (Nursing)

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Dr Che OET Speaking feedback sample 11

Speaking sample 1

A Complete and detailed OET guide and advice for all modules 12

Dr Che Official OET Guide

Success stories and advice from students 13

Success stories and advice

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I have marked more than 1300 OET letters in the last 7 months (from December 2020 till 12/07/2021) First read my introduction below, then go to page no. 97 for a complete guide of 6 pages for all modules of OET, when you finish it, scroll down and read real comments of my students. At the end read my sample writing and speaking feedback. I am Dr Che (MD), a real OET expert. After my graduation in 2105, especially from 2016 till now I have spent a lot time to improve my English skills and reach this level. My students have high pass rates in the real OET exam. Unlike many other OET writing and speaking feedback services, mine is quick, detailed, and comprehensive. I not only correct grammar mistakes, but also, organization, structure, genre and style, conciseness and clarity etc, every OET criterion is covered in my writing and speaking feedback. I not only correct your mistakes but also rewrite better sentences for you to write in letter or to use in speaking (you can see my sample writing and speaking feedback below). Moreover, I have a real experience of OET as I myself passed my OET exam. Please remember, OET is not a difficult exam, most of you who have studied their medical books and course in English can easily pass it. However, without proper guidance and feedback, chances of real improvement and to pass the exam become less. Problem with OET coaching is, mostly those who are authentic (like premium providers) are costly and those who are cheaper, can’t provide real and high-standard feedback and coaching. To balance these things please believe me I am a true OET expert, read comments of my students at the of this book, and I have kept my package prices as low as possible so that you can practice a lot and can pass the exam. I have kept my package prices as low as possible so that most of you practice as much as possible can pass the real exam. Look at my sample writing and speaking feedback to see how my corrections are the best in the market at the moment in comparison with others. Even, I think Premium Providers don’t provide detailed feedback like mine. If you are interested in my writing and speaking feedback service please inbox me. Join my facebook group to contact and for more free guidance and materials. https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2 or email me [emailprotected] Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

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Greeting: Original

18/06/18 Dr Jason Robert Gastroenterologist Newtown Hospital 111 High Street Newtown Dear Dr Robert Re:Ms Anne Hall DOB: 19/09/72

Rewrite

Dr Jason Robert Gastroenterologist Newtown Hospital 111 High Street Newtown 18 June 2018 Dear Dr Robert, Re: Ms Anne Hall, DOB: 19/09/72

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Weak points:

Remember there are different correct options for OET greeting, Let us stick to only one from today, it would save our time, while writing the letters. Putting date at the start is not wrong, but my proposed options is more frequent in OET letters

There are different correct ways to write a date, yours is correct but a better and more liked way to write the date in OET is day in digits month in words year in digits (e.g. 5 December 2020) It is advised to stick to only one style to save your time. (this is about today’s date, mean before Dear Dr ….., ) Comma after Dear Dr….., Comma after Re; Mr…………., Leave a blank line before and after date

Put Newtown on the next line

Purpose: Original

Rewrite

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Thank you for seeing Ms Hall, a 42-year-old secondary school teacher, who I suspect has a gastro-oesophageal reflux with possible structure. I would appreciate your further assessment and endoscopy if required.

Thank you for seeing Ms Hall, a 42-year-old secondary school teacher, who I suspect has gastro-oesophageal reflux with a possible structure. I would appreciate your further assessment and an endoscopy, if required.

Goop points: A good try to make a concise and clear purpose , a 42-year-old (good grammar point, it is good, we use hyphens here)

Weak points: (like in OET official samples, they write age and occupation here in the purpose) if we put, it is not wrong, , but I usually prefer to avoid it, because BOB or age is already given in the above line,

who I suspect has a gastro-oesophageal reflux with possible structure. (Remember we don’t need to mention ourself “I” “me” at again and again, if we mention it is not wrong, but to make our letters more formal we would avoid them and use passive voice where possible to make it more formal. , whose signs and symptoms are suggestive of gastro-oesophageal reflux with a possible stricture. (this is a far better option)

and an endoscopy, if required. (before procedures like endoscopy, we use article “an”, “if required” is an extra information in the sentence, we call it non-defining relative, when we use a non-defining relative clause, we need to put comma before it. I would appreciate your further assessment and an endoscopy, if required. ( a better option here: ( I would avoid using “I” here) Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

Your further management and assessment, including a possible endoscopy, would be highly appreciated. Our purpose for this letter should look like this: I am writing to refer Ms Hall, whose signs and symptoms are suggestive of gastro-oesophageal reflux with a possible stricture. Your further assessment and management, including a possible endoscopy, would be highly appreciated. You can also write Thank you for seeing Ms Hall, whose ….. 2nd Body Paragraph: Original

On presentation today, Ms Hall has reported that she had a two weeks history of dysphagia for solids food which had appeared after upper respiratory tract infection, and self-medicated by an over-the counter Chinese herbal product with unknown contents. Ms Hall also complained of epigastric pain which had radiated to back and in T12 (..).. There are no sensation of a lump and no signs of anxiety. She has recently increased her coffee consumption and take aspirin 2-3 times a month.

Rewrite

Today, Ms Hall reported that she had a twoweek history of dysphagia for solid food which appeared after an upper respiratory tract infection, and she self-medicated herself by an over-the-counter Chinese herbal product with unknown contents. Ms Hall also complained of an epigastric pain which radiated to the back and T12 level. There was no sensation of a lump and no signs of anxiety. She has recently increased her coffee consumption and takes aspirin 2-3 times a month.

Goop points:

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or we can use his/her ….

which radiated to back and in T12 level. (if was not a reported speech, then we can use which radiates, here is this case it would be “radiated” a far better option which we can use in both cases, no need to change according to the tense. epigastric pain which radiated to the back and in T12 level. (epigastric pain radiating to the back and T12 level.

There are no sensation of a lump and no signs of anxiety (we are talking about today’s visit, … for today’s visit we can use either present or past simple, but we started using past, at the start and present at the end……

Last sentence is ok. Today, Ms Hall presented with a twoweek history of dysphagia for solid food which appeared after a possible upper respiratory tract infection, and she self-medicated herself by an over-the-counter Chinese herbal product with unknown contents. Ms Hall also complained of an epigastric pain which radiated to the back and T12 level. There was no sensation of a lump and no signs of anxiety.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph: Original

Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial reflux, Pantoprasol 40mg daily was prescribed and I advise to stop takig OTC product and recommended to reduce coffee and alchol intake. Please note, Ms Hall has a history of dyspepsia sinces 2012, depression since

Rewrite

Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial reflux, pantoprazole 40mg daily was prescribed and I advise her to stop takig the OTC product and recommended to reduce her coffee and alchol intake. Please note, Ms Hall has a history of dyspepsia in 2012, and she has stopped smoking 15 years

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2010, and URTI since 2010. She also had a family history of a peptic ulcer and allergic to codeine and sulput dioxide. Her BMI is currently 28.2.

ago but drinks spirits on social occasions. She also has a family history of peptic ulcer and is allergic to codeine and sulput dioxide Her current BMI is 28.2.

Goop points:

Weak points: pantoprazole (look at spelling and and “p” should be small) Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial reflux, pantoprazole 40mg daily was prescribed and I advise her to stop takig OTC product and recommended to reduce coffee and alchol intake. (Medications: whose name is generic , take first small letter vancomycine, omeprazole, pantoprazole, paracetamol, etc,, if it is trade name or commercial name: then first letter would be capital: Augmentin, Lipitor, etc)

Due to a suspected gastro-oesophagial reflux, pantoprazole 40mg daily was prescribed and I advise her to stop takig OTC product and recommended to reduce coffee and alchol intake. We can make this a better paragraph: Regarding her treatment, she was commenced on pantoprazole 40mg daily and was advised to stop taking the OTC product. She was also advised to reduce her coffee and alcohol intake. (look at my paragraph, the information is almost the same as in your paragraph, but here the information goes smooth, it is coherent and the is quite professional as a doctor.

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(Dr Che has had hypertension since 2019. ) It stared in in 2019, I still have HTN. But here all them (mentioned above, started and ended in the past, and they are not too relevant with patient’s current condition. If you wish you can mention “weight reduction,” dyspepsia, use of steroid etc.

Please note, Ms Hall has a history of dyspepsia (2012), and she has stopped smoking 15 years ago but drinks spirits on social occasions. She also has a family history of peptic ulcer and is allergic to codeine and sulphur dioxide. Her current BMI is 28.2.

Closing: Original

Please do not hesitate to contact me if you require any further information. Yours sincerely, Dr XX

Rewrite

In light of the above, I would be grateful if you could continue to investigate her condition and provide her with a definitive diagnosis. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you require any further information. Yours sincerely, Doctor

Goop points:

Weak points: After social history or any other last paragraph, and before .. Please don’t hesitate ……. Line… Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

We need to restate your purpose, it is just like purpose, but in different style, we must remind the reader about the purpose at this point, E.g.

In light of the above, I would be grateful if you could continue to investigate her condition and provide her with a definitive diagnosis.

Overall Score + Advice

Word count: 179 Overall Grade: C-/C Imagine this student got 350 in writing after 6 letters corrected with me. (success story no. 6)

Please look at all of above points and look at your errors and my suggestions 2 to 3 times, then write this letter gain, keeping this letter in front of you. (I means you write a letter copying from here), don’t rush to write another letter until you have improved all points mentioned here. Really it took me a lot of time to correct your 1st letter, but gradually you will improve yourself and it would take my less time, I hope so.

Individual scores: Purpose Description Purpose of document is immediately apparent and sufficiently expanded as required Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently highlighted or expanded

Grade Your Score 3 2

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Purpose of document is not immediately apparent and may show very limited expansion

Description Grade 2. Content Description Content is appropriate to intended reader and addresses what is needed to continue care (key information is included; no important details missing); content from case notes is accurately represented Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

Grade Your Score 7

Content is appropriate to intended reader and mostly addresses what is needed to continue care; content from case notes is generally accurately represented Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; some key information (about case or to continue care) may be missing; there may be some inaccuracies in content Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate Performance below Band 1

3. Conciseness

Description

3 or 4

& Clarity Grade Your Score

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Length of document is appropriate to case and reader (no irrelevant information included); information is summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful Performance below Band 1

& Style Description

4. Genre

Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

Grade Your Score 7

Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader with occasional, minor inappropriacies; technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and abbreviations may distract reader Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

3 or 4

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The writing shows inadequate understanding of the genre and target reader; mis- or over-use of technical language and abbreviations cause strain for the reader Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient

1 0

5. Organisation & Layout Description

Organisation and paragraphing are generally appropriate, logical and clear; occasional lapses of organisation in sub-sections and/or highlighting of key information; layout is generally good language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Organisation and paragraphing are not always logical, creating strain for the reader; key information may not be highlighted layout is mostly appropriate with some lapses Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Organisation not logical, putting strain on the reader; or heavy reliance on case note structure; key information is not well highlighted and the layout may not be appropriate Performance below Band 1

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Description Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

Grade Your Score 7 6

Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Inaccuracies in language cause considerable strain for the reader and may interfere with meaning Performance below Band 1

3 or 4

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Greeting Original

Rewrite

Dr. Smith Endocrinologist City Hospital Newton

10/02/19

10 June19

Dear Dr. Smith, Re: Priya Sharma, DOB: 08.05.58

Dear Dr. Smith, Re: Priya Sharma, DOB: 8/05/53

Goop points: Overall good effort

Weak points:

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(different options might be correct, but we have to stick to only one style to save our time in real exam) There are different correct ways to write a date, yours is correct but a better and more liked way to write the date in OET is day in digits month in words year in digits (e.g. 5 December 2020) It is advised to stick to only one style to save your time. (this is about today’s date, mean before Dear Dr ….., )

Greeting: Original

Rewrite

Thank you for seeing Mrs Sharma, a 60-year- Thank you for seeing Mrs Sharma, a 60old retired cleric, who is concerned about year-old retired clerk, who is concerned her uncontrolled blood sugar levels. about her uncontrolled blood sugar levels.

Goop points:

Weak points: Cleric (may be you have written clerk, but it seems to me that it is “cleric) She is concerned about her uncontrolled sugars, but what you want the reader to do for her???? You should clearly mention what you want the reader to do. (you may say, I have mentioned uncontrolled sugars, so the reader will know he has to correct them, but OET requires us to make it clear to the reader)

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Remember if our purpose is not clear, and we get less than 2/3 in purpose, we can’t get grade B, even if our rest of the letter is perfect. Also, we have not mentioned the diagnostic of the patient, why her sugar levels are high. (look at these introductions) I am writing to refer a 60-year-old diabetic patient, Ms. Sharma, for further management of her uncontrolled blood sugar levels. Or I am writing to refer Mrs Sharma, who has poor glycemic control despite taking her medications. Your further assessment and management, including control of her sugar levels, would be highly appreciated. Or

Thank you for seeing Mrs Sharma, a 60-year-old diabetic patient, for further assessment and management of her uncontrolled blood sugar levels.

1st body paragraph: Original

Mrs Sharma is married and has 3 Children. She has been suffering from type 2 diabetes mellitus since 1999, for which she takes metformin and glipizide. Please note, she is allergic to penicillin. Her family history is significant for type 2 diabetes mellitus.

Rewrite

Mrs Sharma is married and has 3 children. She has had type 2 diabetes mellitus since 1999, for which she takes metformin and glipizide. Please note, she is allergic to penicillin. Her family history is significant for type 2 diabetes mellitus.

Goop points:

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Overall you have organized social, and past history and family history very well, but it would be far better if you put this paragraph at the end, before restating the purpose again, before “In light of the above, …”

Weak points: Children (you might say it is small c, but it looks capital. ) Putting these information after purpose is not wrong in a letter that is not urgent. But better option is to put before restating the conclusion. Social history, life style, family history etc, should be mentioned at the end. According to new OET criteria for writing, after stating the purpose, we should start 2nd paragraph with the most important and relevant information for the reader. Remember, there are many model letters written before new criteria and student keep copying them blindly. There are different ways to write an OET letter, but we will practice the most common and authentic one.

She has been suffering from type 2 diabetes (remember OET don’t like word suffering in letters, you should use some other words.) She has had type 2 diabetes

2nd Body Paragraph: Original

Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma was worried regarding her uncontrolled blood sugar levels and reported that her blood sugar levels were ranging between 6 to 18. Apart a high blood pressure, no other abnormality was detected on examination of the patient. Therefore, she was commenced on candesartan 4mg, furthermore, blood tests were ordered.

Rewrite

Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma was worried regarding her uncontrolled blood sugar levels and reported that her blood sugar levels were ranging from 6 to 18. Apart from high blood pressure, no other abnormality was detected on examination of the patient. Therefore, she was commenced on candesartan 4mg and some relevant blood tests were ordered.

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Goop points: Your selection of relevant information is excellent, but your unable to communicate this information is a professional way.

Weak points: Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma was worried regarding her uncontrolled blood sugar levels and reported that her blood sugar levels were ranging from 6 to 18. (in this sentences we have used blood sugar levels twice, this is repetition, , our sentence is not too professional and classical as in medical letters. Also your sentence does not flow smoothly, it is not coherent. Look at the sentence below and compare

Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma presented to the hospital complaining of uncontrolled blood sugar levels ranging from 6 to 18.

Apart from high blood pressure, no other abnormality was detected on examination of the patient. (again this sentence is not too professional,) Her examination was unremarkable apart from raised blood pressure (155/100).

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Consequently, she was commenced on candesartan 4mg and some relevant blood tests were ordered. Initially, on 29.12.18, Mrs Sharma was worried regarding her uncontrolled blood sugar levels and reported that her blood sugar levels were ranging from 6 to 18. Apart from high blood pressure, no other abnormality was detected on examination of the patient. Therefore, she was commenced on candesartan 4mg and some relevant blood tests were ordered.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph: Original

On review two weeks later, Mrs Sharma’s blood report depicted a raised HbA1c level (10%) along with a deranged lipid profile. Consequently, she was prescribed atorvastatin 20mg. Moreover, metformin and glipizide doses were increased to 500mg b.d and 750mg b.d respectively.

Rewrite

On review two weeks later, Mrs Sharma’s blood reports showed/revealed a raised HbA1c level (10%) along with a deranged lipid profile. Consequently, atorvastatin 20mg was added to her medication and metformin was changed from 2 nocte to 1 b.d.

Goop points:

Weak points: On review two weeks later, (this is right, but if we only say, “Two weeks letter, “ would look better in my opinion.

blood report depicted a raised (depicted is not a good word in this context, it is used in different way, words given by me as alternative a good options. showed/revealed

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Consequently, she was prescribed atorvastatin 20mg. In addition, metformin and glipizide dose were increased to 500mg b.d and 750mg b.d respectively. ( your both sentences are ok, but it would be better if we can join these two sentences together and make one compound sentence. .. glipizide dose is 5mg b.d. and it has not changed, at the start it was 5mg b.d. and still is the same. Look in case notes, first page above 29/12/13, these were initial medication, ,,now on 12/1/14 we only changed metformin from 2 nocturnal to 1 b.d. ( means she was taking 2 tablets at night before, now will take one in the morning and one in the evening) at this point they added atorvastatin.

Remember: they don’t go into too much details in doses etc, but we should write as perfect as possible. Don’t worry about minor slips in medication etc. Two weeks later, Mrs Sharma’s blood reports revealed a raised HbA1c level (10%) along with a deranged lipid profile. Consequently, atorvastatin 20mg was added to her medication and metformin was changed from 500mg to 750 mg twice daily.

Closing: Original

Rewrite

Today, Mrs Sharma’s pathology report showed a normal lipid profile. However, Control over her blood sugar levels has not yet been achieved.

Today, Mrs Sharma’s pathology reports showed a normal lipid profile. However, control over her blood sugar levels has not yet achieved.

In view of the above, I am referring Mrs Sharma into your care for further management of her blood sugar levels.

Please do not hesitate to contact me, if you have any queries.

Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any queries.

Yours sincerely,

Doctor

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Goop points:

Weak points:

However, control over her blood sugar levels has not yet been achieved (you should clearly state the current values also. ) On review today, her fasting glucose levels were still high (16+) while her random blood sugar levels are now under control. Here after this paragraph we should write past history and family history etc, this is better place, works for both normal referral and urgent referrals Mrs Sharma has had type 2 diabetes mellitus since 1999, for which she takes metformin and glipizide. Please note, she is allergic to penicillin, and her family history is significant for type 2 diabetes mellitus. In view of the above, I would be grateful if you could assess and manage her blood sugar levels accordingly.

me, if you (when we use if in the centre of a sentence, we don’t need to put comma)

Overall Score +

Word count: 199 Overall Grade: C+ or (harldy B-) This student got 2 letters corrected by me, and achieved 370 in writing in real exam (success story no. 15)

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Advice

As your purpose was not too clear and you have not mentioned what you want the reader to do, I am feeling very difficult to give to B-, if you have mentioned it then it was clear B-)

Individual scores: Purpose Description Purpose of document is immediately apparent and sufficiently expanded as required Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently highlighted or expanded Purpose of document is not immediately apparent and may show very limited expansion

Grade Your Score 3 2

1 or hardly 2

Grade Your Score 7

6 5

4 or 5

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from case notes is generally accurately represented Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate Performance below Band 1

3. Conciseness

& Clarity

Grade Your Score 7 6

Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many

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unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful Performance below Band 1

& Style Description

4. Genre

Grade Your Score 7

Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and abbreviations may distract reader Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

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5. Organisation & Layout Description

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6. Language

Description Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

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Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

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Greeting: Original

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Admitting Officer Emergency Department Children’s Hospital Newtown

18 January2014

Dear Sir/Madam, Re: Joshua Vance, DOB: 17 November 2013

Dear Sir/Madam, Re: Joshua Vance, DOB: 17/11/2013

Goop points: Excellent, no error stick to this style, it would save your time in the real exam.

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Purpose: Original

I am writing to urgently refer Joshua, an 8 ½ - week-old male infant, who is presenting with complaints of constipation, feed refusal and mild dehydration. Your further assessment and management including rehydration would be highly appreciated.

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I am writing to urgently refer Joshua, an 8 ½ - week-old male infant, who is presenting with complaints of constipation and mild dehydration. Your further assessment and management, including rehydration therapy, would be highly appreciated.

Goop points: Overall a good effort, your purpose is concise and to the point. Appropriate for the reader, the reader will immediately know that the case is “urgent” + purpose, and diagnosis.

Weak points: feed refusal (this is not too important to mention it here, it will come in detail of visits not in purpose) , including rehydration therapy (this is a non-defining relative clause, means something extra added to the sentence, if we remove this information, our sentence is still ok and complete.) so, with nondefining relative clauses we use comma before and after them. Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

who is presenting with complaints of (this is not appropriate language to write in the purpose, this would be fine to expand symptoms of a visit.) here better options can be , whose features are consistent with mild dehydration and constipation. Or , whose signs and symptoms are consistent with mild dehydration and constipation.

I am writing to refer Joshua, whose features are consistent with mild dehydration and constipation. Your urgent assessment and management of his condition, including a rehydration therapy, would be appreciated.

Or I am writing to refer Joshua, whose signs and symptoms are consistent with mild dehydration and constipation. Your urgent assessment and management of his condition, including a rehydration therapy, would be appreciated.

I am writing to urgently refer Joshua, ……

2nd Body Paragraph: Original

On today’s visit, Joshua’s mother reported that he has not passed any stool for the last 5 days. In addition, she complained that he has been refusing feed and not making wet nappies. He also experienced a single episode of vomiting. Examination of the

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infant revealed mild dehydration and generalized abdominal tenderness. His pulse rate and respiratory rate was 120 and 30 respectively. Please note, he currently weighs 4.1kg.

revealed mild dehydration and generalized abdominal tenderness. His pulse rate and respiratory rate were 120 and 30 respectively. Please note, he currently weighs 4.1kg.

Goop points: Excellent, you have started with “Today’s visit” the most important and relevant visit. This is a must for an urgent letter.

Weak points: . His pulse rate and respiratory rate were 120 and 30 respectively. ( We can omit “rate” at one place, and make it plural like this His pulse and respiratory rates were (now looks more smooth and concise) we can also write only rate here

. Please note, he currently weighs 4.1kg. (remember: sometimes OET case notes mention some general information with today’s visit, we don’t need to mention everything regarding that visit in this paragraph, Only stating his weight at one place would not give too much information to the reader. Look at your 2nd last paragraph where you mentioned weight of Joshua on his birth, if we put his current weight there then it would be clear to understand and compare for the reader) Please read my answer: how I have made the same paragraph more concise and coherent: Today, Joshua’s mother reported that he had not passed any stool for the last 5 days. In addition, he has been refusing feed and not making wet nappies. He also experienced a single episode of vomiting. On examination, his mucous membrane was dry, and he had a mild generalised tenderness.

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3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph: Original

Initially, on 31.12.13, Joshua’s mother was concerned regarding his bowel actions as he was passing hard stools every three days. Consequently, he was diagnosed with mild constipation and her mother was encouraged to continue breastfeeding. On his subsequent visit, his symptoms had not improved and he was commenced on coloxyl drops.

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Initially, on 31.12.13, Joshua’s mother was concerned regarding his bowel actions as he was passing hard stools every three days. Consequently, he was diagnosed with a mild constipation and his mother was encouraged to continue breastfeeding. On his subsequent visit, his symptoms had not improved and he was commenced on Coloxyl drops.

Goop points:

Weak points: coloxyl drops. (this is brand name, we need to use capital with commercial names of medication, like Augmentin, but with generic names no capital letter, like paracetamol, atenolol etc. Initially, on 31.12.13, Joshua’s mother was concerned regarding his bowel actions as he was passing hard stools every three days. Consequently, he was diagnosed with a mild constipation and his mother was encouraged to continue breastfeeding. On his subsequent visit, his symptoms had not improved and he was commenced on Coloxyl drops.

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Original

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Joshua was born via a normal vagin*l delivery at 38 weeks of gestation with no perinatal or neonatal complications. Please note, his birthweight was 3.25kg.

Joshua was born via a normal vagin*l delivery at 38 weeks of gestation with no perinatal or neonatal complications. Please note, his birth weight was 3.25kg.

In view of the above, please manage Joshua’s condition as you think appropriate. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any queries.

Yours sincerely,

Doctor

Goop points:

Weak points:

Please note, his birth weight was 3.25kg. Here you can say: Please note, his birth weight was 3.25kg, now he weighs …kgs.

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In light of the above, I would be grateful if you could further evaluate and manage his condition at your earliest convenience.

Overall Score + Advice

Word count: 195 Overall Grade: B/B+ (2nd and this one 3rd samples are both of same student, he got 370 in the real exam) Excellent and well-organised letter, keep it up. Practice as much as you can to ensure a similar solid B in the real exam.

Grade Your Score 3 2

Description Grade 2. Content Description

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Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate Performance below Band 1

3. Conciseness

5 or 6

& Clarity

Description Length of document is appropriate to case and reader (no irrelevant information included); information is summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

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Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful Performance below Band 1

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4. Genre

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5 or 6

6. Language

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Greeting: Original

Associate Professor Simon Anderson Suite 65 City hospital 25-29 Main Road Centreville 05/12/20 Dear Dr Anderson, RE: Mr Daniel McCrea,DOB: 17/10/1962

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Associate Professor Simon Anderson Suite 65 City hospital 25-29 Main Road Centreville 5 December 2020 Dear Dr Anderson, RE: Mr Daniel McCrea, DOB: 17/10/1962

Goop points: Almost perfect

Weak points:

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Patient’s name and DOB should be on the same line, 5 December 2020 (please leave one blank line before and after this date)

Purpose: Original

I am writing to refer Mr McCrea ,a 58-yearold married man, whose signs and symptoms are suggestive of an adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon.Your urgent assessment and management would be highly appreciated.

Rewrite

I am writing to refer Mr McCrea , a 58-yearold married man, whose signs and symptoms are consistent with adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon. Your urgent assessment and management would be highly appreciated.

Goop points: Excellent intro, have mentioned urgent (that we should never forget to mention)

Weak points:

who has been recently diagnosed with adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon

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, a 58-year-old married man, (this is no problem to mention this info in intro, but we should mention if it is too important for the reader to me more concise) age is already mentioned (in DOB) and married is not too relevant. whose signs and symptoms are consistent (in this patient, diagnosis is confirmed, don’t use word suggestive, (it is used when possible diagnosis or provisional diagnosis) consistent with is commonly used for confirmed diagnosis. In this case instead of signs and symptoms, diagnosis was confirmed by biopsy. Consider something like this. who has been recently diagnosed with adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon

2nd Body Paragraph: Original

Initially, Mr McCrea presented on 19/09/13 with complaints of fever,sore throat,cough, headache and body ache.Apart from his BMI of 28.1 and temperature of 39.8, rest of the examination was unremarkable. Diagnosis of viral infection was made and the patient was prescribed Panadol. Furthermore,he was advised to take rest until his fever subsides. On 08/02/14 the patient complained of abdominal discomfort,gas, fatigue and diarrhea alternating with constipation. On examination,vital signs were within normal range. Moreover, abdominal examination revealed no abnormality. Hence, CBC,Fecal occult blood test and colonoscopy were ordered and the patient was asked to review in two weeks for discussion of his test results.

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Initially, Mr McCrea presented on 19/09/13 with complaints of fever, a sore throat, cough, headache and body ache. Apart from his BMI of 28.1 and temperature of 39.8, rest of the examination was unremarkable. A diagnosis of viral infection was made and the patient was prescribed Panadol. Furthermore, he was advised to rest until his fever subsides. On 08/02/14, the patient complained of an abdominal discomfort, gas, fatigue and diarrhea alternating with constipation. On examination, his vital signs were within normal range. In addition, his abdominal examination revealed no abnormality. Hence, CBC, fecal occult blood test and a colonoscopy were ordered and he was asked to revisit in two weeks for the discussion of his test results.

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Goop points:

Weak points: Don’t copy and paste each and every thing from case notes, no need to write patient’s all visits. Only write relevant visits, you can give a slight touch to previous visit if not too relevant. Is it too important to mention flu for colon cancer??? Your 2nd paragraph should start from patient’s 2nd last visit. (we have wasted 52 words for an irrelevant viral infection) don’t do that plz

Furthermore, he (use space here) On 08/02/14, the (comma after date) On examination, vital (space after comma) vital signs were within (whose vital signs, use his) Moreover (OET don’t like this transition signal please avoid it, use alternatives) In addition, his abdominal (don’t miss his) Fecal occult blood test and colonoscopy were (f small) the patient (use patient’s name at the start, and then use pronouns, using word “patient” does not look good in OET writing. This paragraph is too long, please make it concise 3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph: Original

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On today's visit, the patient is still feeling sick. His blood tests are normal. However, his fecal occult blood test is positive and in colonoscopy cancer is detected in the ascending colon. Therefore a biopsy is taken which showed adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon.

On today's visit, the patient is still feeling sick. His blood tests are normal. However, his fecal occult blood test is positive and the diagnosis of adenocarcinoma of his ascending colon was confirmed on biopsy. (you should mention other test results here, because they would be relevant for the reader, the surgeon would like to know his Hb etc )

Goop points: Less grammatical errors

Weak points: in colonoscopy cancer is detected in the ascending colon. (are you writing to a surgeon?? Surgeon don’t know what is adenocarcinoma?, use medical terms because your reader is a doctor.) Colonoscopy was done today? Colonoscopy was done on 2nd last visit, sample was taken at that time. Today, we received biopsy results. Colonoscopy is already mentioned in your above paragraph.

His colonoscopy revealed an abnormality and malignancy was detected in the ascending colon. His biopsy confirmed adenocarcinoma of the ascending colon.

Closing: Original

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Mr McCrea is a married man with no children. He is a smoker and he has no family history of colorectal cancer,colonic polyps and inflammatory bowel disease. In view of the above,it would be highly valuable if you could manage his condition according. Should there be any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. Yours Sincerely, Doctor

Mr McCrea is a married man with no children. He is a smoker and he has no family history of colorectal cancer, colonic polyps and inflammatory bowel disease. In view of the above, it would be highly valuable if you could manage his condition accordingly. Should there be any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. Yours Sincerely, Doctor

Goop points: Language is good, grammatically good.

Weak points:

married man with no children. Are you sure? go to case notes and correct it yourself please.

Should there be any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. (leave one blank line before and after this sentence)

Overall Score + Advice

Word count: 223 (it is fine to use 180 to 220, a bit more is not an issue unless you include irrelevant information) Overall Grade: C+ (it was a B if you have not included 52 words of irrelevant viral infection) This letter was written by Dr Afsheen Ashfaq, success story no. 2, she got 360 in writing, I marked her 9 letters, you can see how her writing

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Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; some key

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3. Conciseness

2 1

& Clarity

Grade Your Score 7 6

Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful Performance below Band 1

4. Genre

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5. Organisation & Layout Description

6 5

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abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

6. Language

Description Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

Grade Your Score 7 6

Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

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Greeting: Original

Dr Jones Newtown memory clinic 400 Rail Rd Newtown 19 April 2015 Dear Dr Jones, Re: Mrs. Patricia Welshman, D.O.B.: 28/03/1930

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Dr Jones Newtown Memory Clinic 400 Rail Rd Newtown 19 April 2015 Dear Dr Jones, Re: Mrs. Patricia Welshman, D.O.B: 28/03/1930

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Leave a blank line before and after date

memory clinic M and C capital

( Dr Mrs ) are correct with dots or without dots. (Dr is correct, Dr. is also correct) without dot is more common nowadays, just stick to one style only, it would save your time.

Purpose: Original

I am writing to refer Mrs. Welshman, 85-year-old, who is suffering from dementia with possible Alzheimer disease. Her full memory assessment and final diagnosis are requested.

Rewrite

I am writing to refer Mrs. Welshman, a 85year-old lady/vidow, who has dementia with a possible early-stage Alzheimer’s disease. (see below) Her full memory assessment and final diagnosis would be highly appreciated.

Goop points: Your purpose is concise and clear to the reader.

Weak points:

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is suffering from dementia with possible early-stage Alzheimer disease. (better option, yours is not wrong) suffering from dementia with possible (OET don’t like word suffer , don’t use it anywhere in your letter) use alternatives who has dementia with possible early-stage Alzheimer’s disease. ( , whose features are consistent with dementia with possible early-stage Alzheimer’s.

Thank you for seeing Mrs Welshman, whose features are consistent with dementia with a possible early-stage Alzheimer’s disease. Her full memory assessment and final diagnosis would be highly appreciated. Or you can say:” I am writing to refer Mrs Welshman,

2nd Body Paragraph: Original

Mrs. Welsham has been a regular patient of mine since 2007. Apart from mildly elevated LDL cholesterol level (2.9mmol/L) and markedly low vitamin D (54nmol/L), her condition has been generally satisfactory. During a follow-up consultation in 2014, I found that she was not taking her medications regularly. A webster pack to improve compliance with the medication was suggested.

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Mrs. Welshman has been a regular patient of mine since 2007. Apart from mildly elevated LDL cholesterol level (2.9mmol/L) and markedly low vitamin D (54nmol/L), her condition has been generally satisfactory. During a follow-up consultation in 2014, it was noted that she was not taking her medications regularly. A Webster pack was suggested to improve compliance with the medication.

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Weak points: After purpose you should write today’s visit. Remember after purpose we should write the most relevant and important information. In this case, today’s visit is the most important. You we move your 3rd paragraph here. Mrs. Welsham has been a regular patient of mine since 2007. (this is not too relevant info) it adds nothing for the reader. We can omit it.

Avoid personal pronouns, use passive ( don’t say i did this etc) Mrs. Welsham has been a regular patient of mine since 2007. (this is not too important to mention here, please avoid less important information)

Initially, on 28/03/2018, Mrs Welshman’s blood pressure and cholesterol levels were not stable because she was not consuming the medication regularly. . As a result, she was advised to start using Webster pack, but she was reluctant to start it.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph: Original

Today, on 19/4/2015, Mrs. Welsham, accompanied by her daughter, complained of poor memory issue. She also reported trouble while performing daily usual activities. Additionally, significant behavior changes along with an impaired decision making ability were also reported. During the memory assessment, she is unable to recall today’s date and month due to poor short term memory. The possibility of Alzheimer being the cause of her dementia has been discussed with her. She has been advised to undergo a detailed

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Today, Mrs. Welsham came to the clinic accompanied by her daughter with a complaint of poor memory. She also reported difficulty in performing daily activities. Additionally, significant behavior changes along with impaired decision making ability were also reported. On examination using a mini memory assessment, she was unable to recall date and month due to poor short-term memory. The possibility of Alzheimer’s being the cause of her dementia was discussed with her. She is/was advised to

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memory assessment and is due to return after the assessment.

undergo a detailed memory assessment and is due to return after the assessment.

Goop points:

Weak points: Today, on 19/4/2015, (no need to date with today) complained of poor memory issue. (complain and issue both are similar things) use one of them. \ daily and usual are same things , use one of them The possibility of Alzheimer being the cause of her dementia has been discussed with her (improve this sentence, this info can be omitted, not too important. But including it is not wrong. The possible cause of her dementia was discussed with her. (one of the options)

Today, Mrs Welshman presented with her daughter and complained about her poor memory such as missing social events, dinner engagements and hairdresser appointments. Her Mini-memory assessment revealed impaired short-term memory as she was unable to recall the date and month.

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Original

Kindly note Mrs. Welsham has a significant family history of Alzheimer disease. Based on the above, I would appreciate your cooperation in full memory assessment and establishment of the final diagnosis of Mrs. Welsham. Please write me if you need any further clarification. Your sincerely, Doctor

Rewrite

Kindly note Mrs. Welsham has a significant family history of Alzheimer’s disease. Based on the above, I would appreciate your cooperation in her full memory assessment and establishment of the final diagnosis. (look at comments) Please write me if you need any further clarification. Your sincerely, Doctor

Goop points:

Weak points: (look at this better alternative)

Based on the above, it would be appreciated if you could further assess her memory and provide a definitive diagnosis . If you have any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. (better option) ((leave one blank line before and after this sentence) Please include other relevant points of social history , also you have not included her current Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

medications which are very important for the reader to know Socially, she is a widow and lives alone. She was diagnosed with osteoporosis and her current medications are osteo-vit-D , atorvastatin, ibuprofen, metoprolol and paracetamol. Her family history is also positive for Alzheimer's disease.

Based on the above, it would be appreciated if you could further assess her memory and provide a definitive diagnosis.

Overall Score + Advice

Word count: 207 (good control) Overall Grade: B- (borderline B) It is hardly a B, means about 340, 350, 360 Practice more to ensure a solid B. (this letter was written by Dr Asad Raza, success story no. 10, I marked his 7 letters, he got 360 in writing in the real exam)

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Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate Performance below Band 1

3. Conciseness

4 or 5

& Clarity

Description Length of document is appropriate to case and reader (no irrelevant information included); information is summarised effectively and presented clearly

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Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful Performance below Band 1

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4 or 5

4. Genre

Grade Your Score 7

Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and abbreviations may distract reader Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

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5. Organisation & Layout Description

6. Language

Description

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Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

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Greeting: Original

Ms Jessica Riley Physiotherapist Chastonfield Physiotherapy 88 School Road Chastonfield 5 December 2020 Dear Ms Riley Re: Mrs Janet Craven, aged 69

Rewrite

Ms Jessica Riley Physiotherapist Chastonfield Physiotherapy 88 School Road Chastonfield 5 December 2020 Dear Ms Riley, Re: Mrs Janet Craven, aged: 69 years

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Almost perfect, keep it up Weak points:

Leave a blank line before and after date (may be due typing error, but I have to mention it.)

Don’t forget to put comma after Dear Dr …., Colon after aged: (:) If we put years with age, it would be better (yours is not wrong) Things I mentioned are better options; we need to stick to only one style to save our time in the real exam.

Purpose: Original

I am writing to refer Mrs Craven, who was admitted following transient ischaemic attack into your care for follow up physiotherapy sessions. She is scheduled for discharge today.

Rewrite

I am writing to refer Mrs Craven, who was admitted following a transient ischaemic attack, into your care for follow up physiotherapy sessions. She is scheduled for discharge today.

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Weak points:

who was admitted a following transient ischaemic attack (remember this clause is a non-defining relative clause, we need to put comma before and after it.

2nd Body Paragraph: Original

Upon admission, Ms Craven presented with a history of difficulty in talking, numbness and weakness of the right side since 4 hours ago. On examination, blood pressure was elevated, some aphasia noted and her body mass index was suggestive of an obese person.

Rewrite

Upon admission, Ms Craven presented with a 4-hour history of difficulty in talking, numbness and weakness of the right side. Her physical examination was unremarkable except elevated blood pressure (164/100), a mild right bruit in her neck and some aphasia. At that time, her body mass index was 32.

Goop points: A good effort to organize the information and select only relevant ones, you have tried to be more concise.

Weak points:

4-hour history (this is a better option and looks more professional in OET letters. ) blood pressure was elevated, (we can put its value in brackets there)

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On examination, her blood pressure was elevated, some aphasia (it would be far better if you mention here that her rest of the examination was normal), Her physical examination was unremarkable except elevated blood pressure (164/100) and some aphasia. At that time, her body mass index was 32. You have missed an important information here, ( mild right bruit in neck) I would add it here: Her physical examination was unremarkable except elevated blood pressure (164/100), a mild right bruit in her neck and some aphasia. At that time, her body mass index was 32.

Look at my sentence, it looks too professional, it flows smoothly and includes all relevant information.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph: Original

During hospitalization, the electrocardiogram was done and it revealed mild concentric left ventricular hypertrophy. A CT scan showing no evidence of carotid artery stenosis was performed. She has progressed well and has started ambulating with the help of a physiotherapy. Mrs Craven was started on low cholesterol, low fat diet to help reduce weight.

Rewrite

During hospitalization, the echocardiogram was done and it revealed a mild concentric left ventricular hypertrophy. A CT scan showing no evidence of carotid artery stenosis was performed. She has progressed well and started ambulating with help of inpatient physiotherapy. Mrs Craven was started on low cholesterol, low fat diet to help reduce weight.(read comments)

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Weak points: During hospitalization, the echocardiogram was done and it revealed mild concentric left ventricular hypertrophy. (your sentence is correct, I am just giving a better, if a test was done and showed something in its result, we don’t need to tell “it was done” , the echocardiogram revealed a mild concentric left ventricular hypertrophy. (this sentence is more professional and formal)

. A CT scan showing no evidence of carotid artery stenosis was performed. (this sentences does not go smooth and is not quite professional) We can change it and also we can add it with first sentence of this paragraph to make a compound sentence. , the echocardiogram revealed a mild concentric left ventricular hypertrophy and her CT scan showed no evidence of carotid artery stenosis.

. Mrs Craven was started on low cholesterol, low fat diet to help reduce weight. (You are confused here, this was not done during her admission, according to case notes, this is a plan for the patient on discharge, means these are recommendations for her that she would follow after discharge.) Also you can start a new paragraph for her discharge plan. (as you have moved information regarding physio with conclusion, if you wish you can keep this sentence here) Mrs Craven was started on low cholesterol, low fat diet to help reduce weight. After discharge, Mrs Craven is advised to reduce her weight and eat food which is low in fat and cholesterol.

Closing: Original

Rewrite

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Socially, Mrs Craven is married and has 3 children. She is a retired lab assistant. She is a non smoker. In light of the above, it would be greatly appreciated if you could assist with follow up physiotherapy in order to improve muscle strength and flexibility and improvement of balance and co-ordination. Do not hesitate to contact me with any further questions. Yours sincerely Nurse

Socially, Mrs Craven is married and has 3 children. She is a retired lab assistant. She is a non-smoker. In light of the above, it would be greatly appreciated if you could assist her with follow-up physiotherapy in order to improve her muscle strength and flexibility, and to increase her balance and coordination. Do not hesitate to contact me with any further questions. Yours sincerely, Nurse

Goop points:

Weak points:

In English grammar “parallelism” means parts of sentences connected together should be of same type. (read it from google), after “order to” in first part we used “bare infinitive” means 1st form of verb, and we should also use same form in the second part. (in your sentence, 2 nd part is a noun, that is wrong, Look at my correction. in order to improve her muscle strength and flexibility, and to increase her balance and coordination. Yours sincerely, (comma here)

Overall Score +

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Advice

solid pass in the real exam.

Grade Your Score 3 2

Grade Your Score 7

Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader;

4 or 5

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some key information (about case or to continue care) may be missing; there may be some inaccuracies in content Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate Performance below Band 1

3. Conciseness

2 1

& Clarity

Grade Your Score 7 6

Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful Performance below Band 1

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4. Genre

& Style Description Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

Grade Your Score 7

Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and abbreviations may distract reader Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

4 or 5

5. Organisation & Layout Description

Grade Your Score Organisation and paragraphing are appropriate, logical 7 and clear key information is highlighted and subsections are well organized document is well laid out Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 Organisation and paragraphing are generally appropriate, logical and clear; occasional lapses of

6 5

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organisation in sub-sections and/or highlighting of key information; layout is generally good language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

6. Language

Description Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

Grade Your Score 7 6

Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Inaccuracies in language cause considerable strain for the reader and may interfere with meaning

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Greeting: Original

Rewrite

The Director

Blue Nursing Service

207 Sydney Street

West End

Date: 21 May 2009

21 May 2009

Dear Mr/Madam,

Re: Ms Annette MacNamara, DOB: 14/06/1936

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Goop points:

Weak points: Date: (no need to write “Date” everybody knows it is a date)

Don’t leave blank line between “Dear Mr/Madam,” and “Re…….’

Purpose: Original

I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, a 73year-old Single pensioner women, who lives alone to request daily visits by the Blue Nurses and provide Support for her.

Rewrite

I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, a 73-year-old pensioner, who lives alone to request daily visits by the Blue Nurses and provide Support for her.

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Weak points: Your purpose is unclear, you have asked the reader what you want from them, but you have not provided the reason why you want visits etc???? I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, who was admitted for severe injuries after a fall. Your daily visits for her showering and dressing of her wound would be highly appreciated. Purpose should be clear to the reader like this. What was wrong with the patient + what you want from the reader for the patient

2nd Body Paragraph: Original

Ms MacNamara was admitted in our hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall down while descending staires. An X-ray was submitted and a fracture on her right wrist confirmed, among with laceration on her left hand which was caused by Broken glass. She presents also a severe Bruising in her right shoulder and her lower back. Kindly note, a requirement of stitches was provided.

Rewrite

Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall while descending stairs. Her X-ray showed a fracture of her right wrist, and there was a laceration on her left hand which was caused by a broken glass. She presents also a severe Bruising in her right shoulder and her lower back. Kindly note, a requirement of stitches was provided.

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Weak points:

Her X-ray showed (we can use showed/confirmed/revealed) Her X-ray showed a fracture on her right wrist, and there was a laceration on her left hand which was caused by a broken glass. (it look that the X-ray also showed laceration, ,,,, first write observation the X-ray)

She had a laceration on her left hand which was caused by a broken glass, and her X-ray showed a fracture of her right wrist. In the next two sentences, you did the same thing, first already told about X-ray, now again talking about her symptoms. Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall while descending stairs. She had a laceration on her left hand which was stitched and there were also severe bruising on her right shoulder and lower back. Her X-ray showed a fracture of her right wrist. She was prescribed with Normisson 100mg for insomnia, if required, and 2 Panadol every 4 hours for pain.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph: Original

Ms MacNamara has a history of high blood pressure which is currently controlled with prescription of Karvea 150mg every morning day. While her hospitalisaton, she was treated by Normisson 100mg with 2 panadol every 04 hours for insomnia and pain persistent respectively.

Rewrite

Ms MacNamara has a history of high blood pressure which is currently controlled with Karvea 150mg daily in the morning. During her hospitalisaton, she was treated with Normisson 100mg and 2 Panadol every 04 hours for insomnia and pain respectively.

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Weak points: We don’t need to make a separate sentence for medication, her relevant medications I included with her current history and hypertension , I will include in past history etc.

Closing: Original

In view of the above, it would be greatly appreciate if you can provide an assistance to her Ms MacNamara in her daily showering and the dress of her hand wound. In addition to this, a social worker will be given her a visit for organizing her meals on wheels and a physiotherapy. Please note, she has her next appointment for removing the stitches on 31/05/2009 at 10130 AM.

Rewrite

Please note, Ms MacNamara would require your assistance in her daily showering and dressing of her wound. In addition, physiotherapy and a social worker will be required to organise her meals on Wheels. Also, she has her next appointment for the removal of her stitches on 31/05/2009 at 10:30 AM.

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Weak points: her daily showering and dressing of her (make parallel sentence, on both sides of the “and” the words should be similar, ing for or infinitives or nouns. Look at my rewrite how smoothly the information flows and it is coherent and well organized.

Closing: Original

Rewrite

Thank you for agreeing to assist in this queries, Based on the above, I would be grateful if you could help her accordingly. if you should require further information, kindly Contact me. Should there be any queries, please don’t Yours sincerely, hesitate to contact me. Grace Jones

Yours sincerely,

Charge Nurse

Princess Alexander Hospital

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I am writing regarding Ms MacNamara, who was admitted for severe injuries after a fall. Your daily visits for her showering and dressing of her wound would be highly appreciated. Ms MacNamara was admitted to hospital on 20/05/2009 following a fall while descending stairs. She had a laceration on her left hand which was stitched and there were also severe bruising on her right shoulder and lower back. Her X-ray showed a fracture of her right wrist. She was prescribed with Normisson 100mg for insomnia, if required, and 2 Panadol every 4 hours for pain. Please note, she lives alone and she recently moved to a small flat in new suburb. Her niece, Stella Attois, lives and works in Southport and generally visits her once a fortnight. She is hypertensive and takes Karvea 150mg daily in the morning. Please note, Ms MacNamara would require your assistance in her daily showering and dressing of her wound. In addition, physiotherapy and a social worker will be required to organise her meals on Wheels. Also, she has her next appointment for the removal of her stitches on 31/05/2009 at 10:30 AM. Based on the above, I would be grateful if you could help her accordingly. Should there be any queries, please don’t hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely, Charge Nurse

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You have missed her social history that is very important because this is the reason we are asking for help.

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Overall Score + Advice

Word count: 211 Overall Grade: C Plan well before you write the letter, organize information in paragraphs, write in a concise and professional way. Don’t rush to write many letters and get corrected. Write this letter again and send me.

Grade Your Score 3 2

1 or hardly 2

Description Grade 2. Content Description Content is appropriate to intended reader and addresses what is needed to continue care (key information is included; no important details missing);

Grade Your Score 7

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content from case notes is accurately represented Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7

Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate Performance below Band 1

3. Conciseness

3 or 4

& Clarity

Grade Your Score 7 6

Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only

3 or 4

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partially successful Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful Performance below Band 1

& Style Description

4. Genre

Grade Your Score 7

Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and abbreviations may distract reader Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

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6. Language

Description Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning

Grade Your Score 7 6 5

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Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5

Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not interfere with meaning Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3

Inaccuracies in language cause considerable strain for the reader and may interfere with meaning Performance below Band 1

3 or 4

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OET speaking feedback by Dr Che (MD) and an OET expert First I do a role play like real exam on Zoom, I become the patient, my students was the medical professional, at the end of role play I gave general advice and feedback, I also recorded the call (like it is done in real exam, and is marked by other examiner, not the interlocutor who conducts the role play), then I listen to these recordings again and give detailed feedback like below sample. I will also send the recording to my student.

Feedback on recording: Now SAMPLE feedback Timeline 00:51: you said: Hello, good morning, I am Dr……….. (that is not bad, we can do one better thing here, , only Say: Hello, Good morning, with more energy and enthusiasm, and wait the patient to respond and participate) that would build rapport and involve patient with you. One of the doctors ( not doctor) Take it easy, like your real consultation with a patient Aaaaaiiiiiiinnnnnn may I know your name (no need to this hesitation, go smooth with confidence) Timeline: 1:07: Mr Smith, aaaa ooooooonnn (avoid this hesitation) how can I help you today Again: 1:30 aaa ooooo before saying I am sorry to hear that 1:33: let me to ask some question ( remove “to” , questions) aaa ooooooo (hesitation) regarding your general health Do you ( lot of hesitation here, aaaa ooooo , verb is missing use “have”) diabetes or any bowel disease or disease in your gut (good point you used common words, not Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

medical terms, explained bowel to gut) but lot of hesitation, be more smooth and confident: Timeline 2:00 as you failed to ask me a bit more details about my ulcers, that is why I am helping your there with explanation (interlocutor try to help like this in the real exam) Time line: 2:40, based on my ….. your history (say history a bit more clear) clinical examination was not done, no need to mention, ,,, again lot of hesitation here One more thing: instead of talking at one pace, try to put stress on important words, your voice should go up and down (that is called intonation) Aaaa oooo these are aphthus ulcers, do you hear about that ( good point is after telling a medical term, you asked the patient to tell what he/she already knows about that before explaining, you can question like this: have you heard about that? Do you know about that? 3:10: (you are explaining the diagnosis) too much hesitation here aaa oooo it is one kind of ulcers ( ulcer ; no plural) but aaaaa oooooooo in summary Lot of hesitation in explaining the diagnosis, don’t make it too long, keep it simple and to the point, 4:04: this kind of disease (these kind of )……….. 4:10 there is no know causes of ( there is no known cause or there are no know causes of) 4:50 aaaaaa aaa I understand your concern ( no need of hesitation here) One more thing, as I told you on live call, you have called me by name throughout the role play ( we should address the patient by name, that builds relationship and good rapport) You can say: ok Mr Smith, I can understand your concern………… You said “ I am afraid this might not go in 24 hours” instead of directly destroying my hopes of getting well, first we can do echoing ( that is just giving the expression that I understood your concern) we can Ok Mr Smith, I can understand your concern, that you a very important meeting in 24 hours, but I am afraid………. Timeline: 5:00 but aaa oooo we will aaaaa I will aaaaa aann do something management, some measures to you ( management is too formal word for this common patient, avoid hesitation) Say “measures” clearly, give some stress on your words Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

Is that ok Mr Smith ? (good you asked my feedback + you called by my name 5:16; Firstly ( say this word clearly) you can aaaaa , I can aaa treat (avoid hesitation here) 5:23: this following steps ( you can just say “by these steps”) Paracetamol ( pronounce it a bit more clearly) 5:49: I am telling too much things doctor( you know why I am saying this??? Because you have explained all treatment in one go, please don’t do so, give information to the patient in chunks means in pieces, in bites, …and keep checking patient’s feedback, he understands or not) e.g. first tell me about rinsing of mouth…. then check my understanding Then other thing……… 6:12: now you are becoming more fluent with less hesitation 6:22 for your pain relief, so that your pain get relieved (repetition here, avoid it) 6:28: lot of hesitation after explaining the treatment of anti-inflammatory (it looks are blank now, you are searching for words) be smooth and coherent) 6:45: I am afraid of that (delete “of”) 7:00 speaking better way (pronunciation of “better” looks like bitter,) please speak with confidence and coherently 7:12; I am just asking I have some questions, in response you are showing a lot hesitation, you should confidently say: Yes Please 7:30 again hesitation Please improve a little bit pronunciation, speak words clearly Your speaking speed is not too fast nor too slow, it is ok, but speak clear words and improve pronunciation 8:10, I asked, when can I do so that these ulcers don’t occur again? Your replied: yes I understand your concern (this is good point) 8:32: at the end you asked do you have any other concerns ( good thing to ask at the end)

I: Linguistic Criteria

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Description • Pronunciation is easily understood and prosodic features (stress, intonation, rhythm) are used effectively. • L1 accent has no effect on intelligibility.

Easily understood. Communication is not impeded by a few pronunciation or prosodic errors and/or noticeable L1 accent. Minimal strain for the listener.

Easily understood most of the time. Pronunciation or prosodic errors and/or L1 accent at times cause strain for the listener.

Produces some acceptable features of spoken English. Difficult to understand because errors in pronunciation/stress/ intonation and/or L1 accent cause serious strain for the listener. Often unintelligible.

Grade Your Score 6

Frequent errors in pronunciation/stress/ intonation and/or L1 accent cause severe strain for the listener.

Almost entirely unintelligible.

NO response

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Please improve pronunciation, stress on words and sentence, don’t speaking at one speed Make words and things clear to the patients, for examples (read above comments)(

2. Fluency Description Completely fluent speech at normal speed. Any hesitation is appropriate and not a sign of searching for words or structures.

Fluent speech at normal speed, with only occasional repetition or self-correction. Hesitation may occasionally indicate searching for words or structures, but is generally appropriate.

Grade Your Score 6

Uneven flow, with some repetition, especially in longer utterances. Some evidence of searching for words, which does not cause serious strain. Delivery may be staccato or too fast/slow.

Very uneven.

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Extremely uneven.

Long pauses, numerous repetitions and self-corrections make speech difficult to follow.

1 Impossible to follow, consisting of isolated words and phrases and self-corrections, separated by long pauses. NO response

Goop points:

Weak points: There was lot of hesitation. Speaking and information was not fully organized. Speaking smoothly An in organized way, lead the role play,

Appropriateness Description 3.

Entirely appropriate register, tone and lexis for the context. No difficulty at all in explaining technical matters in lay terms.

Mostly appropriate register, tone and lexis for the

Grade Your Score 6

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context. Occasional lapses are not intrusive.

Generally appropriate register, tone and lexis for the context, but somewhat restricted and lacking in complexity. Lapses are noticeable and at times reflect limited resources of grammar and expression.

Some evidence of appropriate register, tone and lexis, but lapses are frequent and intrusive, reflecting inadequate resources of grammar and expression.

Mostly inappropriate register, tone and lexis for the context.

Entirely inappropriate register, tone and lexis for the context. NO response

4/4+

Goop points:

Weak points: This part can also be improved a lot,

4. Resources of Grammar and Expression Description

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Rich and flexible. Wide range of grammar and vocabulary used accurately and flexibly. Confident use of idiomatic speech.

5 Wide range of grammar and vocabulary generally used accurately and flexibly. Occasional errors in grammar or vocabulary are not intrusive.

Sufficient resources to maintain the interaction. Inaccuracies in vocabulary and grammar, particularly in more complex sentences, are sometimes intrusive. Meaning is generally clear.

Limited vocabulary and control of grammatical structures, except very simple sentences. Persistent inaccuracies are intrusive.

2 Very limited resources of vocabulary and grammar, even in simple sentences. Numerous errors in word choice.

1 Limited in all respects. NO response

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Weak points: That was not too bad, but need improvement in this part, use accurate words and tenses, and make good sentences that are easy for the reader to understand, join sentences with connectors, and transition signals, use linking words, organize your interview very well, don’t keep searching for words and tenses

II: Clinical communication criteria:

A: Indicators of relationship building A1: Initiating the interaction appropriately (greeting, introductions, nature of interview) A2: Demonstrating an attentive and respectful attitude A3: Demonstrating a non-judgemental approach A4: Showing empathy for feelings/predicament/emotional state

Description Adept use Competent use Partially effective use Ineffective use

Grade Your Score 3 2

1 0

Goop points:

Weak points: Call the patient by name, built good rapport, ask patient’s feedback and understanding, call the patient by name, please patient’s concerns deeply, actively listen to your patient

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B. Indicators of understanding & incorporating the patient’s perspective B1: Eliciting and exploring patient’s ideas/concerns/expectations B2: Picking up the patient’s cues B3: Relating explanations to elicited ideas/concerns/expectations

Description Adept use Competent use Partially effective use Ineffective use

Grade Your Score 3 2

1 0

Goop points:

Weak points: Involve patient in your conversation, give information in chunks and keep involving your patients

C. Indicators of providing structure C1: Sequencing the interview purposefully and logically C2: Signposting changes in topic C3: Using organizing techniques in explanations

Description Adept use Competent use

Grade Your Score 3 2

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Partially effective use Ineffective use

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Goop points:

Weak points: Provide logical structure and lead your interview smoothly

D. Indicators for information gathering D1: Facilitating the patient’s narrative with active listening techniques, minimising interruption\ D2: Using initially open questions, appropriately moving to closed questions D3: NOT using compound questions/leading questions D4: Clarifying statements which are vague or need amplification D5: Summarising information to encourage correction/invite further information

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Goop points:

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You should have asked a bit more about my ulcers and other symptoms etc at the start, after asking one question, you immediately went to the diagnosis, also keep asking questions and involving your patient in your conversation

E. Indicators for information giving E1: Establishing initially what the patient already knows E2: Pausing periodically when giving information, using the response to guide next steps E3: Encouraging the patient to contribute reactions/feelings E4: Checking whether the patient has understood information E5: Discovering what further information the patient needs

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Goop points:

Weak points: Give information by chunks, means give some information, then check patient’s understanding and slowly go to the next thing You explain complete treatment in one go, you should have done this in chunks, also at some other points don’t keep talking for long time, go by steps, in chunks and involve patient

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Overall Score + Advice

Overall Grade: C/C+

Please avoid hesitation, be confident and more coherent and organized in your interview, avoid grammar and vocabulary mistakes, improve pronunciation means say words clear, put stress(intonation), give information in chunks , collect information well

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Complete OET Guide and Advice by Dr Che My students keep asking me on daily basis for advice regarding OET preparation. It is very difficult for me to explain to each and every student, so I have decided to write a comprehensive and detailed post so that I can guide you thoroughly. It would be a longer post, but really would be very helpful for your preparation. (I will keep updating this post). Please remember, this is my personal guidance and thinking, I might be wrong at any place and you might disagree with me at some points. Please remember, I am not a classical English teacher, myself done with OET and taking other medical exams, but I have worked hard on English language for more than 4 years. I run a private hospital. I am just telling this to ensure you that I am your colleague; I don’t need to misguide you for any financial benefits. Reading and listening: these two modules are a bit self-practice, at the moment I don’t know any online or off-line OET provider who teaches these modules properly. If you subscribe to any OET coaching, what most of them (almost all) do is that for these two modules, they will give you just some general tips and tricks and advice, how to answer question in reading and listening, (skim and scan, highlight, underline, read this first and then do this etc) these general things can be easily found on YouTube free videos. Even if you purchase any course for these modules, at the end you have to do self-practice. Reading is quite challenging module in OET, many students fail in this. What I recommend you for now to pass these two modules is first watch some free YouTube videos for general advice on how to answer questions in these modules, how to solve questions. Skimming and scanning techniques etc (if you don’t find sufficient techniques for OET modules, you can search for IELTS reading and listening tips, because overall advice to solve the questions is the same) Also, read tips from official OET books to answer these two modules (e.g. OET practice book 1 and 2 for medicine and nurses, and for other specialties also, Kaplan official book etc) After you get a general idea how to answer questions, first do 4 or 5 official sample reading and listening tests from official OET website.. After these samples, next reading and listening practice should be done from official practice books 1 and 2 (as reading and listening is the same for all, you can do it from medicine practice book 1 and 2 or nursing practice book 1 and 2, check whether these tests are same on both of them). So far you have done the 4 free samples, + 6 reading and listening samples from practice book 1 and 2. For now, these 10 are the most authentic reading and listening materials available, they are like real exam reading and listening, other available free materials are not of same quality. After doing these 10 sets of practice, then go for other reading and listening materials, like Jashan files, and many other reading and listening materials that many OET candidates have (there are almost 25 to 30 in total), I will keep updating this post. I am planning to make a comprehensive and well-organized, and a detailed OET reading course, as many students find this difficult and fail in reading module in the real exam. But it will take time as I am too busy and I don’t launch any new service until I work a lot on it. Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

Let us now go to the next module

Speaking:

Speaking: this is not a difficult module, only you need to speak according to OET criteria. I know my students and some other people even native English speakers failed in this module, only due to overconfidence. They thought their English is good and they speak it on daily basis in their daily life. They didn’t practice, so in the real exam they may fail. Here, the main thing is to do speaking according to OET criteria, not as we wish to do this. Don’t take this module as easy, some students fail in speaking for just a small margin, like 340, 330 or 320, then start remarking etc and wasting their time. How to prepare for speaking: First of all, watch some free videos on YouTube for general tips regarding OET speaking. They will give you tips and general idea about speaking. You can also read speaking part of official books like practice book 1, 2 and Kaplan official book. After doing this, start practicing with a speaking partner, you should have at least 2 speaking partners because sometimes one is not available for practice, you can do with other. Please remember, find a good speaking partner, otherwise your speaking will deteriorate instead of improving. Where you can find speaking partner? You write a post mentioning your specialty (medicine, nursing etc), exam date, your time zone or any other requirement, then post in different facebook OET groups, like in my own OET groups. Join this group to find appropriate speaking partners https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetspeaking

Apart from practicing with a speaking partner, please remember most of the speaking partners would also be students. It is a good practice with them, but they can’t provide authentic feedback. So, my sincere advice is to get some feedback on your speaking from any true OET expert, like premium providers and others (please remember most of the authentic OET websites are very costly for speaking feedback, you can check their rates), and there are many cheap and substandard speaking feedback offers on facebook and here and there, (avoid them until you are sure about their standard and quality), to balance all of these things I am providing very detailed and high quality speaking feedback in reasonable prices. I call my student on Zoom, then we do the role play, I become the patient, and my student a doctor or a nurse etc, then I record this call and assess it later, by listening to audio, like OET does in the real exam. I provide a live detailed feedback on zoom; according to all OET Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

official speaking criteria + I send the recording to my students also. You can see my sample speaking feedback on my facebook group or you can send me a message on facebook messenger, I will forward you the sample, so that you can see the quality of my feedback. Please, Please, be aware on facebook, there are many fake tutors and in-person coaching centers also, they are not doctors or nurses, if they are doctors or nurses the standard of feedback is not good. So, please first read their samples before subscribing to their service. To find the best speaking partners join this dedicated and well-organized OET speaking group https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetspeaking

Now let us move to the writing module

Writing: Writing: this module is not as difficult as many students consider it. The main problem is that I am sorry to say that but it is fact that many of our colleague doctors or nurses are overconfident, they take the exam without proper preparation. According to my experience almost all doctors or nurses who have studied medicine in English have enough English language knowledge to pass writing module. The only problem is lack of proper preparation and guidance. Two main reasons why we fail writing module 1. Overconfidence, or not having enough time to prepare well for the exam 2. Taking sub-standard and un-authentic writing coaching or correction service To resolve the first problem, my advice is please take this exam serious, it is not difficult to pass with proper preparation. OET exam is costly and time-consuming (we apply more than 1 month before exam, then 3 weeks waiting for result, if unfortunately, there are 10 or 20 marks low in one module, apply for remark, then wait for another 3 to 6 weeks, if remark result is not favorable, then apply again 1 month before exam, and so on) time of medical professionals is very important, we can’t afford such a long time for an English exam, so please please take it serious, it is not a difficult exam. 2nd problem: a common problem, relatively authentic tutors are official premium providers, but they have 2 main issues 1. They are very costly (taking around 12 to 25 USD, per letter correction) it is almost unaffordable for most of our colleagues, even if we purchase 2 or 3 corrections, that would not be too helpful in improving, we need to practice more letters and get corrections to ensure a good preparation for the real exam. 2. Mostly Premium providers are not doctors or nurses, they mainly focus on grammar and vocabulary etc, that is only 1 of 6 OET writing assessment criteria. No doubt, some of them are experts. Another problem is, usually on YouTube or their classes etc we see famous Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

faces like … … and …. But we don’t know who really marks our letters, because these people get a lot of letters to correct, we don’t know who will be correcting our letters and its quality etc, Please remember, some of them are very good, I am not writing to tell you a lie, most of them are directly trained by OET, so we should check their standard and compare their fees etc. As we are not sure, all of our letters are marked one or more tutor, so I think they don’t know our individual progress. Every letter is a new for them. These are my personal thoughts, you might disagree with me. Please compare sample corrections of different OET experts/website before your final decision to subscribe to any feedback service. After premium providers, now comes other people including me (Dr Che), there are one or 2 famous writing correction websites but they are like most of us, means not directly trained by OET as a premium provider. Here the main issue is quality of the feedback. I have spent more than 4 yours after my graduation to improve my English and reach this level. First you should ensure quality and then should see price of feedback. Some people invest on advertisem*nts etc and become famous, but we should always judge their quality first then get feedback. I think there may be people on facebook etc, who ask others or their students to write positive posts about their service and then keep posting in different groups. These reviews may be fake or may be real. I myself ask my students who pass their exam to write a post, but please remember you can ask anyone who writes a post for me, I never ask them to exaggerate things for me, I only ask them to please write a real and honest feedback. None is fake, I can show you their letters and payments receipts etc. Our result reports can be easily edited, some fake people copy results of other students and post in different groups claiming their success. So, please be careful, I don’t mean all are fake, but some might be fake. So, how to find an authentic feedback service: first of all see their sample feedback (don’t subscribe to any service without seeing their samples), then decide whether this person or website is authentic or not. Then shortlist the authentic ones, now compare their quality and prices and decide which suits you better. Till 01/03/2021, I am the first one in the history of OET writing correction service who started such a detailed and new style feedback service, till today, no one including all famous websites or private tutors or facebook tutors provides such quality and detailed feedback, really usually it takes me on average 1 to 2 hours to mark one letter of this quality sometime more time. I have kept the prices low as compared to many corrections services for two reasons. 1. Most of us can’t afford such expensive service, because I am myself a doctor like many of you, we can’t afford 15 to 25 dollars for one letter correction. 2. If we take an expensive service we will only get feedback on 2 or 3 letters etc or bit more, but that would not be sufficient for good preparation. I kept prices low so that you can practice a lot Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

and can pass the exam. Believe me, I am not telling a lie, I started correction service in December 2020, till today 19/04/2021, my more than 51 students have passed OET writing and/or speaking with grade B, and many are ready to take the exam and some are waiting for their results. In this period only 3 or 4 of my students failed in writing, 1st one was a doctor who only get 2 letters corrected only 2 days before the exam, her first letter was of grade C, 2nd of grade C+, she still had more than one day, I told her to write more letters, but she didn’t, and got 300 in the real exam. Other was a nurse, who had written good letters with me, but all letters were written in more than 45 minutes and stopped getting feedback 1 or 2 weeks before exam, and failed in all modules. Please take care, there are many English teachers claiming to be OET expert, there are 6 OET criteria and language is only one of them. I know my students whose grammar etc was wrong, but with just a little bit effort of both us, she got 350 in writing. Even if your grammar is not good, but reader of the letter can easily understand what you want to say, then we can get grade B. Please take care, many general English teachers don’t know which information is relevant for which disease, what are the common ways to write medical history and about signs and symptoms. They just correct your grammar etc, and provide cheap correction service. Please don’t waste your money and time. Subscribe to any official premium provider or someone how has real experience of OET. I am a doctor (MD), I myself took the OET exam. I have spent more than 4 years in improving my English and reach this level. My OET students get good results after my coaching. You can trust me for real and authentic coaching. What to do before you start getting feedback, watch some free YouTube videos for general OET writing tips, watch official OET YouTube channel + others, get a general idea about it, writing criteria, how to organize etc, if you are a doctor read writing section of book “Future Land” others e.g. nurses etc can also find some parts of this book useful. Also read writing tips from official practice book 1 and 2. Ready my sample corrections to get a general idea about corrections and mistakes. Then start writing your letters and get feedback. One last thing, at any time, if you think my correction is not the same as my samples, you can take your money back without any hesitation. Even my corrections are now far better than these samples I send you for free because these are taken from my initial corrections, till now I have marked a lot of letters.

Many students ask me time of preparation and any plan etc: For an average student whose basic English is good, dedicated study of 1 to 2 months is enough. Many doctors or nurses can’t give proper time to their OET preparation due to their jobs etc, so please don’t take any premature attempt. Prepare well. For speaking and writing, you don’t need to study too much, watch some free YouTube videos, read a little bit from the books I mentioned. Almost most of Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/ or email us [emailprotected] , WhatsApp number (only text please) +447405870079

you already have enough English language knowledge, you just need a little bit guidance and feedback to achieve grade B in writing. So, quickly watch and read these things, and start getting feedback and practicing with your study partners and your OET teacher. For reading and listening after watching free videos and tips from books I mentioned, start doing practice and practice all available reading and listening materials. If you have done all of them once, starting doing them again. (you make your own plan, according to your free time and timetable, this is not a big issue, study as much as you can)

My last advice: being your colleague my advice is please please don’t make any premature attempt, means don’t take the exam without preparation. It is easy but difficult to pass without preparation and guidance. Unfortunately, if you fail once, apart from wasting a lot of money, you will also waste a lot time. It will be frustrating, and time-consuming. Waiting for remark, then apply again, wait for exam date, then wait for result etc. Save you time and money, instead of wasting it on remarking and/or taking the exam again, invest a little on preparation and pass the exam in first attempt. Best wishes, keep in touch with me for any updates, and keep checking my posts for any updates and more tips. Please you are not a member of my facebook groups, join all of them and keep in touch with me. 1. https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2 (about 18000 members) OET Preparation 2. https://web.facebook.com/groups/384158182347207 (about 53,000 members) OET materials and writing correction service group 3. https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparationgroup Free OET materials group (about 6000 members) My facebook profile: https://web.facebook.com/drcheoet/ to send me direct message for any questions or queries. (inbox me for link to my google drive) My email: [emailprotected]

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My first success story, a friend of mine based in the UK; I marked helped him a lot and marked his letters and provided individual coaching for free. Naturally, we don’t like free things, he subscribed to one Pound per letter correction from someone else, when came back to me again after some day, his writing was deteriorated. But finally he managed to improve his writing again.

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2nd Success story, Dr Afsheen from Pakistan, very energetic and hard working student, I marked her 9 letters, she got 360 in writing. You can see screenshot of last letter I sent, it date, her exam date, her result date, to ensure it is not a fake feedback

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3rd success story, Dr Haseeb Shah from Pakistan, very hard working doctor, strictly followed my advice with close eyes, his writing was too weak at the start, but due to hard of both of us, he obtained 380 in writing, unbelievable for both of us, ha ha. Screen shot of his last letter and date of chat and date of exam and result can be compared to ensure it not a fake feedback

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4th Success story: Dr Quratulain Haider, she got 360 in writing

Success story 5: a doctor from Canada, taking OET for EFCMG USA registration, contacted me about 3 days before exam, his English was very good, but his first letter was of more than 360 words with grade less than C, he was not following OET criteria, in just 2 or 3 days, I helped him a lot in a short time, even till a few minutes before exam, we were in contact, he got 360 in writing, but failed speaking, ( I was not providing speaking feedback at that time)

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Success story no. 6: A doctor from Australia, interesting story, her writing was very weak, but she followed my advice, her first letter, sample no. 2 for doctors, 1st letter of this file, was of C/C level, I marked her 6 letters, amazingly she got 360 in writing, (as she failed reading, I am not going to attaché screenshot or her name) Success story no. 7: Dr Zulqarnain Riaz from Pakistan, his letters were good, but still needed guidance for ensure a B, I marked his 4 letters. Very nice person, best wishes for his future

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Success story no. 8 Dr Zakir Jamal contacted me only 3 days before exam, I marked his 4 letters, and he passed his exam, screenshot of chat attached to show you it is not a fake feedback. Please read his chat, below

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Success story 9: Dr Ghiyas Uddin from India, first paid me only for one letter to test my service ha ha ha, after getting feedback on first letter, purchased 4 four more letters. Very nice person, and hard working, contacted me just a few days before exam, and got 350 in writing,

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Success Story no. 10 Dr Asad Raza, I marked his 7 letters, interesting thing about this doctor is that after the exam he was able to recall his complete letter, he wrote the letter and sent to me, after reading real exam letter, I told him he will get 350, 360 or 370, look at our chat and his result, he got 360 in writing. A very nice person really

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Success story no. 11 Dr Syeda Fatima from Romania, a really nice and good doctor, I marked her and her sister Dr Manhal Rafi, 9 letters in total, both of them passed the exam. Dr Fatima was a bit weak in writing, so she is more happy than her sister. Ha ha ha

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Success story 12. Dr Aina Khan, I marked her one free letter, after passing the exam, she told me it was helpful

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Success story 13: Dr Awais Khan, very busy doctor he paid me for 7 letters but could only send me 2 letters for marking he was busy, he passed the exam, I will return his balance money for 5 letters

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Success story no. 14: Dr Danushki Fernando from Australia, I marked her four letters, and she passed the exam in first attempt. You can compare our chat date with her exam and result date, to show you her feedback is not fake

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Success story no. 15, a doctor who got 370 in writing, he told me not to show his name.

Success story no. 16: a doctor from Pakistan, I marked his 2 letters, he got 400 in writing, but 340 in listening, that is why I am going to show his name. Success story no. 17: I did one free correction for her, she got 380 in writing, but 330 in listening, so I am not going to show her name.

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Success story no. 18: Dr Manhal Rafi from Romania, sister of Dr Syeda Fatima, both are them are very good doctors, I corrected their 9 letters in total, and both of them passed.

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Success story no. 19, A nurse from Philippines, I marked her 5 letters, she got 350 in writing but could not pass reading module, so I am not going to show her name.

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Success story 20. A doctor from USA, taking OET for EFCMG Usmle registration, failed in writing in first attempt, contacted me just 2 or 3 days before exam, she was hard working, I helped her a lot in a short time, marked her 6 or 7 letters, I took one to one session with her, she got 400 in writing, she took two exams, one day paper-based, next day OET@Home, failed in reading I think in one, she was able to do clubbing for her registration (exception for her, generally clubbing is not allowed in the USA)

Success story no. 21: Dr Sahar, got one paid letter marked with me, passed her exam

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Success story no. 22 A doctor from India, got 5 letters marked by me, and pass her exam in first attempt, 370 in writing

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Success story 23. A doctor who sent me a letter for free correction, I think one day before exam, I pointed out her weak points, she was weak in writing introductions and some other points, I told her to write purpose, of 5 letters, then I marked them, she passed the exam, all was free for her

Success story no. 24: A doctor from Sri Linka, I think, now living in the UK, I marked 10 letters, she got 350 in writing, but failed other modules, so I am not showing the name.

Success story no. 25 Dr Junaid Jawaid, paid me for subscription a long time before the exam, but could not write letters earlier as he was busy, I marked his 6 letters in total, + 30 minutes one to one coaching, as he was still weak in writing. Finally passed and got 370 in writing

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Success story no. 26 Dr Madiha Asim, I marked her only one letter before exam, after her exam she was able to recall her complete letter, she sent me case notes and her letter also, (of real exam, recalled) I told her you are at borderline, you will pass, the same letter she sent to a paid writing correction service, they marked the same letter as grade C, in the real exam result she shot 360 in writing and passed other modules also,

My chat with her a day after the exam

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Same letter marked by a correction service

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Success story no. 27 Dr Maham Zeba, contacted me only 6 days before exam, she was about to defer her exam, as she was not improving with Benchmark, I offered m helped and asked her to the exam. She passed in first attempt, look at our chats so that you are sure it is not fake feedback

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You can see the date in above chat, her exam was on 6 th of Feb 2021, she contacted me on 31/01,

Read my reply when she was going to defer her exam

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Success story no. 28 Dr Lena Ali from Ali from Iraq, a very nice and humble doctor, I marked her 6 letters, + one to one sessions, she got 360 in writing, passed other modules also

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Success story no. 29, Dr Snehitha Reddy from India, she got 7 VIP letters correct by me, and got 370 in her writing

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Success story no. 30 Dr Nuzhat Zaheer from UK, contacted me just a few days before exam, I marked her 4 letters and she got 350 in writing

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Success story no. 31 Dr Roma Lal from India or UK, got 4 letters corrected by me. Got 360 in writing

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2 Unsuccessful students:

Believe me, I am not telling a lie, I started correction service in December 2020, till today 01/03/2021, my 31 students have passed OET writing with grade B, and many are ready to take the exam and some are waiting for their results. In this period only 2 of my students failed in writing, 1 st one was a doctor who only get 2 letters corrected only 2 days before the exam, her first letter was of grade C, 2 nd of grade C+, she still had more than one day, I told her to write more letters, but she didn’t, and got 300 in the real exam. Other was a nurse, who had written good letters with me, but all letters were written in more than 45 minutes and stopped getting feedback 1 or 2 weeks before exam, and failed in all modules. After this these reviews, I have a lot of next success stories, if I add all of them here, this file would become very long, so I am just making a brief list:

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Succes s story no. 32

Name of candidate

Country of stay or origin Italy

No. of letters/speaking role plays marked with me 14 letters, 4 role plays

Real exam score

Remarks

Worked hard on all modules

10 letters

Speaking 400, writing 350 Writing B grade

Hafsa Saboor Mazharul Alam

UK or Pakistan Canada

7 letters, 11 or 12 speaking role plays

Writing 360, speaking 360/

India

4 letters, 2 speaking

Sainath Kakarla

India

4 letters, 2 speaking

Jamshed Majeed

10 letters, 2 speaking

Fati Risan

In Sri Lanka, (Pakistani) Pakistan

Writing 370, speaking 380 Writing 360, speaking 360 Writing 360, speaking 410

Failed in speaking in 1st attempt, in 2nd attempt only got my feedback Passed all in 1st attempt Passed all in 1st attempt Passed all in 1st attempt

Hasanwitha Koli

4 letters

360 in writing

A doctor

India

15 letters, and 6 or 7 speaking

380 in writing, but 320 in speaking

Dr Saba

Pakistan

3 letters

Grade B in writing

Haider Kattub

From Egypt, exam in Dubai

6 letters, 6 or 8 spekaing

Writing 380, speaking 370

Muddasir Rasool

Pakistan

Just a few speaking

Grade B in speaking

Marco Gemelli

Pass all in 1st attempt, was about to defer her exam, but contacted me I helped a lot in writing, but we started speaking feedback later, Passed all in 1st attempt Just contacted me about 5 days before exam, but passed in 1st attempt Passed speaking in 2nd

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Dr Priya R William India

Rizwan Anwar

Pakistan

A Nurse

A doctor

Saudi Arabia India

Jyothi Anush

India

A doctor

Pakistan

Usmle Destination

Pakistan

Nor Hashimah

Malaysia

51 52

Meriel Keiy Maryam Javed

Singapore Pakistan

Sephora sid

5 letters

390 in writing

Alexander Chach (physiotherapist) Naveed Shaikh

Uk, Pakistan Ireland

4 letters

350 in writing

Pakistan

10 letters

360 in writing

Paksitan

5 letters

Grade in writing

Australia UK India Sri Lanka

5 letters 4 letters 3 letters 6 letters

370 in writing 350 in writing 350 in writing 360 in writing

Laraib Ambreen (pharmacist) A doctor A doctor A doctor Sripali Dassanayake Sadaf Fatima

India

5 letters

350 in writing

62 63

A doctor Kainat Memon

Pakistan Pakistan

6 letters 8 letters, 2 speaking

64 65

A doctor Maverick

USA, Cuba Pakistan

7 speaking 5 letters

380 in writing Writing 370, speaking 440 350 in speaking 390 in writing

55 56 57 58 59 60

A senior doctor, got just 1 or 2 brief writing feedback 3 letters

Grade B in writing

3 or 5 letters

350 in writing

6 letters, 6 or 8 speaking 2 letters

Writing 350, speaking 380 Grade B in writing

Grade B in writing

12 letters, 10 speaking 370 writing, 400 speaking 2 letters, 2 speaking Grade B in speaking and writing 6 letters, 6 or 8 360 writing, 430 speaking speaking 5 letters 350 in writing 2 letters 370 in writing

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Passed all in 1st attempt

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Maverick Usmle Matche22

A nurse

Svetlana Iv

Pakistan

3 letters

380 in writing

UK, Russia? UK? Or Ireland

4 letters

360 in writing

9 letters, 10 speaking

370 writing, 430 speaking

1st attempt Passed all in 1st attempt

Passed all in 1st attempt

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